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I used to search the skies with you,
and never, ever worry.
Now I just waste your time,
you're always in a hurry.

I'm tired of playing this dumb game.
I want to say we're through.
But I never get the words just right
'cause I secretly still love you.

I dream about your eyes at night,
I see you in the stars.
I pray, I think, I hope someday
this love would both be ours.

You were so kind and loving,
I thought our bond was true.
But then one day you turned away.
My heart was slashed in two.

The words I say and things I do
seem to always break my heart.
because I remember our love, sweet and tender,
and the horror that tore us apart.
I don't quite know what I was thinking when I wrote this... I've never actually broken up with someone (I've never had a bf to begin with ^^;) so... I dunno, maybe I have such a good imagination I can just feel what someone would be feeling... meh.

UBEREDIT: OMGZ -huggles everyone- This poem is going to be PUBLISHED! I entered it in a contest, and IT GOT IN!!!

-huggles again and dances- Thank you everyone ness this is the best thing that has ever happened to me and I'm so happy! :D!
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MysticalNarwhals Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wow this is so me... ;^; Guys smashing my heart into bitty pieces... This is amazing I congratulate you on getting is published. You deserve it~

(I'm loving your Roxas icon by the way)
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Golden-Leaves Featured By Owner May 12, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
The rhyming's a little off at some parts, but it was very nice. A pleasure to read :)
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FakeD-A-Smile Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2009
This is amazing, well done.
It's really really good :)
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Hannahbobana Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2009
this says everything
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sarra-paladin Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2009   Writer
wow that is way good and that is egsactly how i feel at the moment thanks for writing this poem
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redspirit-wolf Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2008
omg.
deep really deep
i understand compeletly tho
...
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enigmatically Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2007
"The words I say and things I do
seem to always break my heart.
because I remember our love, sweet and tender,
and the horror that tore us apart."

this is what i went through. something that was i held true, changed to something hurtful overnight.

anw, i also used to write about feelings i never really had before.. :) when i was younger..

but when u get older.. and u've actually experienced the pain, u can't find the words to express it all down..

strange isn't it? anw i think ur a fab poet. keep it up dear. *hugs*

love
-eNigMa-
;)
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Avilana91 Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2007   Writer
omg... this is exactly what happened with my ex and I :cry:
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Blood-written-tears Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2007  Student Artist
I love it; I understand the message in it.
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Suicide-Perfect Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2006
Overly dramatic and kinda pointless. It makes me want to laugh at how corny it is written. It's not accualy poerty. It's like a journal entry in poetry form. No skill is needed for a theropy poem.
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